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浙江省新高考英语写作读后续写17-教案

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读后续写(Continuation writing)

读后续写。阅读下面的短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。

Exercise 17

In a certain store where they sell puddings, a number of delicious things are laid out in a row during the Christmas season. Here you may select the one which is most to your taste9 and you are even allowed to try them before coming to a decision. I have often wondered whether some people, who had no intention of making a purchase, would take advantage of this privilege. One day I asked this question of the shop girl and I learned it was indeed the case.

“There's one old gentleman,” she told me, “and he comes here almost every week and tries each one of the puddings, but he never buys anything. Well, let him come if he wants it, and I hope there are a lot more stores where he can go and get his share. ”

She was still speaking when an elderly gentleman limped up to the counter and began looking closely at the row of puddings with great interest.

“That's the very gentleman,\" whispered the shop girl, then turning to him, “would you like to try them, sir? Here's a spoon for you to use.\"

The elderly gentleman, who was poorly but neatly dressed, accepted the spoon and began eagerly to try the puddings, only braking off occasionally to wipe his red eyes with a large torn handkerchief.

\"This is quite good, but a little too heavy.\"

It was quite evident that he sincerely believed that he might eventually buy one, and I am positive that he did not for a moment feel that he was in any way cheating the store. Poor old man! Probably this sampling was all that was left him from the time when he could afford to come and select his favorite pudding.

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Among the crowd of happy looking Christmas shoppers, the little black figure of the old man seemed pitiful, and in a burst of mercy, I went up to him and said, \"Pardon me, sir, will you do me a favor? Let me purchase you one of these puddings. It would give me much pleasure.

注意:

1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;

2. 应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语; 3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好; 4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。

Paragraph 1:

He jumped back as if he had been stung(刺痛),and the blood rushed into his wrinkled face .

Paragraph 2:

He pulled out a worn little black pocketbook and began counting out shillings and pennies on to the counter.

一.试题详解

1.核心内容

本文通过作者的所见所闻真实细腻地叙述了一位家道败落但自尊犹存的老人,利用圣诞节期间免 费品尝食品的优惠,来满足他的某种需求。作者出于同情想对这位老人表示一番好意,提出帮他买一块 布丁。

2 .写作思路

(一)明确故事人物关系(characters):故事中的主要人物为作者(一个顾客)、一个女店员以及一个老人(布丁品尝者)。

(二)理清故事主要事件(events):一位家道败落的老人,利用圣诞期间免费品尝食品的机会去一家布丁店试吃布丁;作者从女店员那里了解到老人的情况以后为表示一番好意打算帮老人买一块布丁。

(三)根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展(development):故事的总体发展可能是作者的好意反而让老人自尊心受挫,为保全面子老人被迫选购原本不想购买的布丁,从此以后老人再也不会出现在这家店里。这样的结果让两个人都很难堪,作者意识到仅有善良的意愿是不够的。

(四)结合下划线词罗列写作要点(points): 根据文本内容结合下划线词,展开想象,罗列故事情节。 例如第一段可以通过以下问题获取写作要点:What was the man's response? What did he say?

What did he do?第二段可以问以下几个问题:Why did he do so? What was the author's reaction?

二、 参考范文

He jumped back as if he had been stung, and the blood rushed into his wrinkled face. He refused with more dignity than I would have thought. With a quick decision he turned to the shop girl and said in a loud voice, “ Kindly pack me up this one here. I will take it with me.\" He pointed at one of the largest and most expensive of the puddings. The girl took down the pudding from its stand and started to make a parcel of it. Then she waited for the old man to pay for it.

He pulled out a worn little black pocketbook and began counting out shillings and pennies on to the counter. To save his “honor\afford. How I longed for the power to unsay my unwise words! It was too late though. The old man may have been poor but he was very, very proud. And that was the last time I saw the old man, which means that he will never go there to try pudding any more. 三、 范文解析

范文围绕文本内容及段落的首句进行了合理的拓展。根据第一段首句中的\"jumped back, blood

rushed into his wrinkled face”等词可以判断老人对于作者的善意请求甚感尴尬,所以续写的内容应该 是老人委婉拒绝并挑选了一块最贵的布丁让店员包起来。根据第二段首句中“a worn little black

pocketbook,counting out shillings and pennies” 等词判断老人其实没有太多的钱。所以续写的内容是 老人这样做其实是为了保全自己的面子,此后老人再也没有出现。老人这样的做法让作者也很尴尬,很后悔。

四、 提炼归纳

读后续写需要学生在阅读理解的基础上创造性地写作。在具体写作的过程中,学生需要在阅读给 定的文本、把握故事的主要人物事件后对故事的发展作岀合情合理的预测。在该练习中,我们通过画线的词以及续写段落的首句整理自己的写作思路,为故事的发展制定合理的结局。

除了对内容要点进行筛选整合以外,我们还要考虑句子的结构以及句与句之间的连接。比如第一 段用\"...than I would have thought”,第二段用“How I longed..?及“may have been poor” 几个虚拟语气 的结构来表示作者的惊讶、尴尬与后悔的情绪。再比如第二段中用两个which引导的定语从句串联内 容,让句型更丰富,内容更饱满。

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